MzLyricist
How much better is it to get wisdom than gold!
You did great! I'm still hurting on the inside @ the ending .;l'//
If you really felt it, lol I did my jobYou did great! I'm still hurting on the inside @ the ending .;l'//
here's a link to another story i did....You did great! I'm still hurting on the inside @ the ending .;l'//
That had to be done.:shittt: NOT THE BABY TOO!!!
I unno, cuz the couple I got inspiration from, they were toxic. they were both so thorough that when they did fight, it was vicious.I love how humble Shannon is towards Jeff. The respect there is admirable. Under different circumstances that relationship could have definitely flourished! Ugh I'm still sad lol
Yeah true, but, I'm speaking on the respect factor. That respect that they had for each other was golden! Can you do a part 2 to the short story where somehow miraculously they all lived and are doing very well and living happily ever after.......:ha:I unno, cuz the couple I got inspiration from, they were toxic. they were both so thorough that when they did fight, it was vicious.
Look at how quick Shannon was to ill....
That just made me more sad because I KNOW that junk will never happen!:mf1::fuckem2::jordan:Lol Jeff cutting the grass while little Tyson playing in his tree house?
You prolly the only person who shed a tear for Nae....she was 7 months pregnant for crying out loudNigga! It's a good thing I just happened to come in this forum and see this thread. Soon as i saw the thread, I immediately began reading. Wow.
This shyt was definitely darker than Frantic. But damn...
"She was cut off by multiple shots from Jeff. He just didn’t care anymore."
...I was not expecting that. You kinda conflicted on how you should about that part.
B/c on one hand, that was some Cold-blooded shyt he did. No soul. But on the other, you see his point of view, and understand why he did it. He sees his girl and son gettin hauled off by Rico and Struggles, so his 1st instinct is to protect his family by any means.
Plus in his mind, he's thinking Nae was a part of that. So seeing his girl gettin mauled just erased the last bit of morals he had. Kinda ironic tho how all this started with him and Shy snatching up Nae. And pretty much the same thing happening to Shannon.
Seriously tho, you got screenplay worthy material. B/c i was actually actin out the scenes, and toying wit the different reactions and interactions with the characters. Especially that very scene where Jeff and Shy was mulling over the idea of snatching Nae.