Snatched : An Original Short Story by Dupacalypse Now!
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I say do it.
It shouldn't be too hard for him to draw each character and scenes. The detail description you provide should make it easier.
man i'm so busy at work right now...i wanted to do something for valentines day....i might still....but it's not coming to me right now...i'll work on it Thursday night at work
TonyDubbz
Legion of Trill | Keep god in ya life, fuck nigga
@Dupacalypse I really fuck with this story bruh, not done yet but I had to stop and just comment real quick. Like you said you always been good at painting vivid pictures with your stories and this one is no different.
thanks bruh
TonyDubbz
Legion of Trill | Keep god in ya life, fuck nigga
Good shit bruh, just finished it all.
You got my support 100%. Gonna show this to my peoples. I dont wanna speak too soon but I may be able to help you out as far as getting it published also bruh, I need to holla at my bro in FL. first and then i'll get back to you. The company that he works for publishes comic books and paperback books.
You got my support 100%. Gonna show this to my peoples. I dont wanna speak too soon but I may be able to help you out as far as getting it published also bruh, I need to holla at my bro in FL. first and then i'll get back to you. The company that he works for publishes comic books and paperback books.
That's whassup
That's awesome Bruh, I truly appreciate tGood shit bruh, just finished it all.
You got my support 100%. Gonna show this to my peoples. I dont wanna speak too soon but I may be able to help you out as far as getting it published also bruh, I need to holla at my bro in FL. first and then i'll get back to you. The company that he works for publishes comic books and paperback books.
i entered a contest for first time writers with this story....
haven't heard anything back yet.....but they said they'll post the results in october
Just gotta email,
I ain't win...(shit was like 8k...motherfuckers)
but they gave me some pretty favorable rankings on a scale of 1-5
Below is a brief commentary for your entry in the 25th Annual Writer’s Digest Self-Published Book Awards. Thank you for participating!
Entry Title: Snatched/Frantic
Author: Du
Judge Number: 25
Entry Category: Genre Fiction
A few quick notes~
Structure, Organization, and Pacing: 4
Spelling, Punctuation, and Grammar: 3
Production Quality and Cover Design: 2
Plot and Story Appeal: 4
Character Appeal and Development: 4
Voice and Writing Style: 4
Judge’s Commentary*:
You've written a terrific story with compelling and colorful characters. You capture the way they speak beautifully and have a way of describing the action very well. I especially liked how you handled the character of Shanae. She is heartbreaking, caught up in something she can't get out of. In order to get your story published and be successful, I suggest the following: (1) Be sure to use spellcheck. Nothing throws a reader out of a story than to find typos and there were a few; (2) Don't change tenses in the middle of a paragraph. For example, in your first paragraph, you say 'Ronnie was a professional heist man and has been for most of his life'. The correct way is: Ronnie was a professional heist man and had been, etc. It confuses the reader if you change past tense and present tense in the same paragraph; (3) Since your story is full of action, short sentences bring tension to the story and push the reader to keep reading; (4) When you have long sentences, the use of commas help break up the sentence and allows the reader to understand better what you're trying to say. Otherwise, great job with this story. It has enormous potential and with these little changes, will be a terrific book.
I ain't win...(shit was like 8k...motherfuckers)
but they gave me some pretty favorable rankings on a scale of 1-5
Below is a brief commentary for your entry in the 25th Annual Writer’s Digest Self-Published Book Awards. Thank you for participating!
Entry Title: Snatched/Frantic
Author: Du
Judge Number: 25
Entry Category: Genre Fiction
A few quick notes~
- Books are evaluated on a scale of 1 to 5, with 1 meaning “needs improvement” and 5 meaning “outstanding”.
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Structure, Organization, and Pacing: 4
Spelling, Punctuation, and Grammar: 3
Production Quality and Cover Design: 2
Plot and Story Appeal: 4
Character Appeal and Development: 4
Voice and Writing Style: 4
Judge’s Commentary*:
You've written a terrific story with compelling and colorful characters. You capture the way they speak beautifully and have a way of describing the action very well. I especially liked how you handled the character of Shanae. She is heartbreaking, caught up in something she can't get out of. In order to get your story published and be successful, I suggest the following: (1) Be sure to use spellcheck. Nothing throws a reader out of a story than to find typos and there were a few; (2) Don't change tenses in the middle of a paragraph. For example, in your first paragraph, you say 'Ronnie was a professional heist man and has been for most of his life'. The correct way is: Ronnie was a professional heist man and had been, etc. It confuses the reader if you change past tense and present tense in the same paragraph; (3) Since your story is full of action, short sentences bring tension to the story and push the reader to keep reading; (4) When you have long sentences, the use of commas help break up the sentence and allows the reader to understand better what you're trying to say. Otherwise, great job with this story. It has enormous potential and with these little changes, will be a terrific book.
word, editing.....
lol, this the same shit that used to hem me up in school, i'd slam turn in a rough draft, cuz i ain't feel like going back and checking every word....
but imma do it, that much i promise.... i just gotta force myself to settle down and get back at this shit....
creating ain't hard, writing it down is a task, but editing is a chore bruh......
but i owe it to myself, especially with this much consistent positive feedback...
i owe it to myself and those who invested.... so imma hop on that shit
lol, this the same shit that used to hem me up in school, i'd slam turn in a rough draft, cuz i ain't feel like going back and checking every word....
but imma do it, that much i promise.... i just gotta force myself to settle down and get back at this shit....
creating ain't hard, writing it down is a task, but editing is a chore bruh......
but i owe it to myself, especially with this much consistent positive feedback...
i owe it to myself and those who invested.... so imma hop on that shit